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Naught remains in me now
Faith is something I lost long ago
Even as time flows
My Suffering, Moira disavows

Do you remember, Sklaboi?
Humans, shameful slaves of destiny
Yet keeping other slaves in captivity
That dry humor, I wanted destroyed.

...And yet, now I grow weary.
This was nothing more than Thanatos' game
That which was once aflame
Has now been extinguished, despairing.

I just want this to end.
Yes, here in this paradise.
With my beloved Sklaboi, under these skies.
In here, I don't mind being penned.

...Eh? Who is this uninvited guest?
Does she intend to be a pest?
She must leave. Take your parasol. Begone.
Stay back! On this place, you cannot border on!

"How long do you plan on deluding yourself?"
What? My Sklaboi? Insult them not, you elf!
"I see your mind is still blind."
Is your only purpose to make us maligned?!

Perish by my black sword.
That arrogance, like that of a lord!
The stars shall fortell your demise.
The moon, reflecting the death of what I despise!

...What?! What have you done?!
Are you unsatisfied that you've slain that I've treasured?!
You have taken my loved ones...
Unforgivable. Detestable. Your days have been measured!

What is it that you desire?
Realize that you will merely tire.
You should know, Moira will take them, under her command
Don't pretend to symphatize, you're nothing but a liar!

...Unless...don't tell me, do you really understand?
When you came here, what did you see in your hand?
Who gave you my name to be scrawled?
Was this conquest undoubtly planned?

Ahh...I'm sick of this brawl.
Please, just end it all.
I get it now. This is my loss.
Freedom.Or.Death. It is now your call.

Remove this stone. It is nothing but dross.
Ah, I'm glad our paths have crossed.
Moira has seen this end from across.

(The preview image was made in Walfas, does that count?)

Behold! My first poem!'s not that great. But if you enjoy it, then wonderful!

As you have already guessed, this poem is told from the POV of Xanthos, the witch form of Elefseus. The first four verses are mostly monologue, but everything else is what happens during Elegy, i.e. the battle between Yukari and Xanthos.

I figured since Elef was a Greek, it had to be done in some form of Greek Poetry. Lyric Poetry was one of them, and a subcategory of that is Quatrain...which is what I chose! However, they are done in different schemes.

First four verses -> abab
Next three -> aabb
Next one -> abab
Remaining -> aaba, bbcb, ccdc, dddd - basically a chain rhyme

So yeah, irony is that I have a distaste for poems, however, I was rather captivated by :iconspdude18:'s 'Through the Witch's Eyes' poetry series, which delved into the witches of Puella Magi Madoka Magica. So I decided to do my own! Kudos to him for changing my usual dislike of poems for once!

And yes, lines from 'Doreitachi no Eiyuu' are littered all throughout the poem.

Elefseus is from 6th Story Moira and thus belongs to Sound Horizon. His witch idea/transformation was by me.
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Hao-007 Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2012  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
it is a good poem, i knew someone who did peopms a long time ago [link] she my lil of DA *kind of but not real life sister*

and here some completely make no sence:
The ULTIMATE warrior !
Kigurou-Enkou Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2012  Student Writer
Krawkley Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2012
:iconwowplz: Wow, It's amazing! I love it! :D
Kigurou-Enkou Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2012  Student Writer
SPDUDE18 Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2012
Quite an interesting piece you made here. I'm glad my work has inspired you. BTW, that Witch reminds so much of Zero-Two, I love it.
Kigurou-Enkou Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2012  Student Writer
Damn, another time someone has correctly guessed who I based the witch off without me saying XD
SPDUDE18 Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2012
Feel free to give feedback to my poems.
Kigurou-Enkou Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2012  Student Writer
IShingoYabuki Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Hey, this is quite an interesting piece of poetry, I rarely see anyone else write it so nice job!
Kigurou-Enkou Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2012  Student Writer
Thanks ^^
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